rokky
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Post by rokky on May 30, 2018 20:51:58 GMT 5.5
Nice Bro kuch mis he sudhar lo ya uske bare me Clearl karo thanks
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Post by Admin on May 30, 2018 21:01:18 GMT 5.5
nice start bhai......bhai roshni kon hai? karma ke beti ka naam yumina hai na......please ye confusion clear kr dena bhai You are right yumina hi Hai my mistake bahut din bad likha hu na characters bhul gaya tha ... Review karna chahiye mujhe
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Post by kabir on May 30, 2018 21:01:56 GMT 5.5
hi admin , very nice update . all the best . take care ……...
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Post by Admin on May 30, 2018 21:13:00 GMT 5.5
Let's grow this forum
Update 2
ere ship ko aate dekh mere sena me josh o junun badh gaya … Sath sath ek chintit chehra bhi khill gayi … wo thi meri jaan lili meri pyaRI JAAN Hamara ship dono sena ke bich utra aur mere bahar nikal kar aate hi meri jaan lili akar mere baho me shama gayi …hum mahine bhar ki judai ek pal me bhul ek dusre me khone lage the tabhi dusri sena ke bhayankar dahad ne hame hosh me laya … Main … jaan ye sab kya hai ye sena ye ajeev se jeev kaha se aaye … Lili … achha hua jaan aap lout aaye hum to dar hi gaye the na apki koi khabar upar se ye musibat … Main … ha bolo ye sab kya hai mere na hone se yaha kya hua … Lili.. jaan pata nahi sab kuchh thik tha lekin achanak 2 din pehle ye ajeev si sena hamare sima pe khadi dikhi bas aisehi khadi hai na aage badhti na kuch karti hai …. Main … kya do din se aise hi khadi hai lekin kiu kaha se aaye ye jeev kon hai ye jeev … Lili.. hame kuch pata nahi hum bas suraksha ki dristi se hamari sena ko taiyar rakha hai parishiti ka mukabla karne ke surat me .. Main … achha kaam kiya jaan mujhe tumpe garb hai …aab apni sena ko piche kar lo inko main dekhta hu … Lili … ji jarur jaan …kuchi der me hamari sena piche hat gayi rah gaye bus hum mujhe kuch kuch andaza tha ye sab hai kya mujhe un jeevo mese koi life energy feel nahi ho rahi thi … Main …. Crimson prakat ho …. Mere hokum kje sath crimson prakat ho gaya … Crimson… malik hokum … Main … crimson timhe pata hai ye sab hai kya … maine un ajeev jeevo ki aur ishara kiya tha… Crimson … ji malik mujhe pata hai ye sab bhram hai … ye sab dartk stone kin shakti ka asar hai … Main … dark STONE ye darkstone kya hai… Crimson … malik dark stone bhi mere purane malik ki ek shakti hai jo sayad apke desh me dunjeon ke roop me ubhra hai … dark stone bahut hi khatarnak hai aur besabra shakti hai … sayad isliye wo apne hone ka ehsaas ap sabhi ko kara raha hai … Main… hmm lekin abhi inka kya karu kya ye aise hi chalega mere desh basi vaivit hai … Crimson… nahi malik aab agar inpe hamla karenge ye turant hi gayab ho jayenge … Main.. hmm maine apna hath upar kiya aur sthanantar yani gate magic ka istemal kiya aur sath sath ek jor ka chhalang lagaya aur gate se nikalte apne black dron pe sawar ho gay … black dron pe khada main aisa tha jaise swayam yamdut agaye hai … Dragon ne ek gota lagaya aur sidha un black panther jaose jeevo pe akar ruka aur apna muh khol agg ke bhyankar lapte bikherne laga un lapto ke chute hi sab gayab hone lage min bhar me puri ki puri sena gayab ho gayi lekin tabhi waha ghanghor andhera cha gaya sath sath ek bhayankar hasi kin awaj aayi … Crimson … malik yeh black stone ki awaj hai jarur usne aap ko chuna hai dungeon me aane ke liye … Main .. agar aisi baat hai hai to mai jarur jayunga … tabhi maine apna hath crimson ki aur badhaya sath SATH sital bhi udte huye agayi aur mere me shama gayi aur dekhte dekhte main ek roshni manab me badal gaya mera pura jisam roshni bikher raha tha … Mere jisam ki roshni se wha faila andhera gayab ho gaya …. Andhera chat gaya… sab kuch normal ho gaya… Sital aur crimson mere jisam se nikal aayi …. Main bapas apni jaan ke pass agaya … Main.. jaan chalo mahal chalte hai … maine apne gate spell ka istemal kiya aur ek jhatke me mahal me pahuch gaya sidha shava me jaha meri ek aur jann intezar me thi usko suchna mil gayi thi mere agman ka …. Mere waha pahuchte hi Kristine singhasan se utar gayi main jakar baith gaya… Main… app logo ko darne ki jarurat nahi hai musibat tal gayi hai philhal ke liye waise bhi mere suraksha kabach ke rahte kuch ho nahin sakta … shava mere agman se chahak uthi main singhasan se uth gaya aur apni jaan aur bakio ke sath CHAL PADA mahal ki aur … mere sath meri dono patni Kristine aur lili thi mohan aur yumina bakio ko lekar chala gaya guest toom ki aur yumina apne kamre me ma beti pehle hi mil chuke the shava me aab bari meri thi Apne kaksh me pahuchte hi maine dono ko baho me bhar liya tabhi piche se meri ek aur jaan akar mujh se lipat gayi wo thi lelina meri jaan …. Main meri tino bibio se lipat raha tha apna pyar barsa raha tha tabhi phirse kamre me andhera chane laga ek khatarnak muskan us andhere me mere ankho ke samne ghoom ne lagi maine aapna hath aage badhaya ke andhera gayab ho gaya tabhi mere mastisk me crimson bola …
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Post by kabir on May 30, 2018 21:36:24 GMT 5.5
hi admin , apki dono update bahat achsa hai . apki story parke esa lagta hai jese story ki har seen meri achoki samne horahi hai . all the best . take care ……….
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Post by arjun7271038711 on May 30, 2018 21:39:05 GMT 5.5
nice update
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Post by bullet on May 30, 2018 21:49:34 GMT 5.5
nice to meet to you agian vary wonderful update admin
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Aks 21
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Post by Aks 21 on May 30, 2018 22:01:59 GMT 5.5
welcome back bhai........bohot hi sandaar updates........awesome starting.........!
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Post by Aks 21 on May 30, 2018 22:02:29 GMT 5.5
welcome back bhai........bohot hi sandaar updates........awesome starting.........!
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Post by krsuraj159 on May 30, 2018 22:15:28 GMT 5.5
Superb update
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