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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 10:26:36 GMT 5.5
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Post by arya on Mar 26, 2018 10:26:36 GMT 5.5
Hi friends Main afmin sir ka bahut bada fan hun or unki sabhi story maine padhi hai. Jo ki sabse best hoti hain .so main aaj ek story likhne jaa rha hun ye mera life ka pahla story hain. Agar mujhse koi glti ho jaye to uske liye sorry friend
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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 10:36:59 GMT 5.5
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Post by arya on Mar 26, 2018 10:36:59 GMT 5.5
Update 1
Brahmanf ki sabse khubsurat grah earth jo ek anant kabhi khatam na hone wali space me basa hain jo ek bahut hi rahsmaye hai. Jahan rojana koi na koi ghatna ghat hi jati hai. Issi dharti pe kayi mahapurush ne janm liya or iss dharti ko pure tinolokon me lok priye banaya. Issi dharti pe kayi aise jagah bhi hain jo insano se chhupi hui hain. Chali chalte hain story pe . India ki sabse pavitr nadi ganga jo himalya se niklti hain. Jo kayi pahadon or kasbon se gujarti hain. Ganga nadi kayi hazaron se bahti ayi hain lekin is bar kuchh alag huye ek kale libash me ek mahila ek kothri ko ganga me baha deti hain.lekin ye us kothri me se kisi bacche ki rone ki awaz ati hain. Wo kayi chhote chhote pathron or pedon se takrati or tairti rhti hai. Kuchh durjane ke bad wo kothri ek kinare ke pass ped se jaa takrati or ruk jati hain. Thik usi samye kuchh bhediyon ka jhund wahan pani pine ata hain or rone ki awaz ko sunta hai. Un bedhiyon ka mukhiya us kothri ke pass pahunchta hain or kothri me bacche ko dekh muskurane lagta hain. Aur uske bad?
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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 11:02:42 GMT 5.5
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Post by shivanag on Mar 26, 2018 11:02:42 GMT 5.5
Congrats for new thread wait for updates
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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 11:12:28 GMT 5.5
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Post by krsuraj159 on Mar 26, 2018 11:12:28 GMT 5.5
Superb update
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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 11:51:30 GMT 5.5
arya likes this
Post by Admin on Mar 26, 2018 11:51:30 GMT 5.5
Let's grow this forum
Super bro thanks for being so nice keep going but if your story not a eBook story then post it in the story section ... Reply me so that I can move this thread to story section ... Thank you ..
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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 13:47:57 GMT 5.5
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Post by arya on Mar 26, 2018 13:47:57 GMT 5.5
Let's grow this forum Super bro thanks for being so nice keep going but if your story not a eBook story then post it in the story section ... Reply me so that I can move this thread to story section ... Thank you .. story sir syad
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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 14:06:50 GMT 5.5
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Post by arya on Mar 26, 2018 14:06:50 GMT 5.5
Update 2 Achanak pani pi rhe sabhi bhediyon ki najar unke mukhiya pe padti hain jo ek kinare chupchap khade muskura rhe hain or kothri nihar rhe hain. Tabhi sabhi bhediya wahan jata hain or kothri me muskura rhe bacche ko dekh kar hairan hote hai. Tab un mese ek bedhiya age badhta hain or apne mukhiya se puchhta hain.
Bedhiya 1- sardar ye baccha? Sardar - sambha dekho duniya ka rakshak ne janm le liya hain. Sambha - magar sardar ye to ek insani baccha hai. Ek insani baccha kaise humara rakshak ho sakta hain? Sardar- ye insani baccha nhi hain ye asal me ye satya hain jo purv janm me pure brahmand ke rakshak hua karte the or unhe dokhe se unke karibi ne hi unhe mar diya tha. Ab hume bahas me smaye barbad nhi karna chahiye inhe surkshit rakhna hoga kyunki inke dushman jald hi apne tapasya jag jayenge or inhe khatam kar denge. Sambha- sardar agar ye ek alokik hain to inko koi kaise mar sakta hain? Sardar - isliye kyunki inki sakti abhi soyi huyi hain jabtak ye 18 year ke nhi ho jate tabtak ye ek mamuli insan hi rhenge. Sambha - to hum kaise inhe surakshit rakh sakte hain jabki ap achhi trh se jante hain ki hum abhi bahut kamjor hai? Sardar - iska upaye hain sambha meri beti pari or inki wife jin nurja. Hume unhe bulna padega wo hi hain jo inki madadt kar sakti hai. Sambha - kya jin nurja inki wife hain? Wo to bahut khatarnak hai or humari dushman bhi. Or beti pari wo kaise inki raksha karegi wo to ek chhoti bacchi hain. Sardar - haan. Mante hainki nurja humari dushman hain lekin ye bhi sach hain ki wo inki purv patni bhi hain. Or beti pari asal me uska janm inki raksha ke liye hi huya hain. Sambha - thik hain sardar. Iske bad sabhi bhediyen huuuu........ki awaj nikalne lagte hain. Phir sardar us kothri ko apne danto me leke kinchhte huye use apne bedhiyon ke jhund ke pass chale jate hain .
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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 14:07:37 GMT 5.5
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Post by arya on Mar 26, 2018 14:07:37 GMT 5.5
Let's grow this forum Super bro thanks for being so nice keep going but if your story not a eBook story then post it in the story section ... Reply me so that I can move this thread to story section ... Thank you .. story syad hume jyada jankari nhi hain iske bare me sir
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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 14:26:40 GMT 5.5
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Post by krsuraj159 on Mar 26, 2018 14:26:40 GMT 5.5
Nice update
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Raja
Mar 26, 2018 14:35:15 GMT 5.5
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Post by srinun1988 on Mar 26, 2018 14:35:15 GMT 5.5
Nice stat bhai
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