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Post by kingg on Oct 20, 2018 12:40:55 GMT 5.5
Friends mai apni ye story yaha likh raha hu aur iske do part honge Fhilhal aap sab ko bta du mai ye story kahi pe likh chuka hu aur jisne bhi padhi ho ye story shayad unhe koi problem na ho aur jo pahli baar padhe please support me Mai pahle bta du ye part aaj pura post kar dunga
Next part ko likhne me thodha samay lag sakta hai isme jo galtiya ho kripya apna chota bhai samajh ke maaf karna kyuki ye mera pahla experience hai kuch likh kar logo ka entertain karne ka so i hope aal of you support me
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Post by kingg on Oct 20, 2018 12:43:01 GMT 5.5
Introduction Hero - Ajay Singh Age 20 Maa - Meera singh Age 40 looking average figure Dad - Virendra pratap singh missing Sister - Shruti Age 18 Bahut hi cute aur chanchal h Baki ke character aate rahenge _____________________________ New entry Maa ke ghar walo ki yani mere Mama ke ghar ki
Ram singh - nana age 78
Klawati devi nani dehant ho gaya h
Sher singh- mama age 52 Laxmi - mami age 48
Vishal - bada beta 26 saal sadi ho gai h
Sapna - vishal ki ptni age 23
Ruchi - beti age 22
Pawan singh - chote mama age 48
Rinki singh - choti mami age 46
Surya - beta age 23 Sneha - beti 20 Ye rahi mere mama ki femily ______________________________
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Post by kingg on Oct 20, 2018 12:47:04 GMT 5.5
Update 1 Ek chota se gown me chote chote ghar bahut hi sandar tarike se basaye gaye the gaown ek santi chayi huwi thi subha ka kusnuma mausam tha pede pe chidiyon ke chachane aawaje aa rahi thi jo mausam ko bahut man moha k bana raha tha Gaon ke kinare ek manjila makan bana huwa tha jinme 3 2 kamre bane huwe the ek chota rasoi bana huwa tha aur ek chota sa store room bana huwa tha ab bor na karte huwe story pe aata hu ek kamre me ek bahut hi sundar ladka soya huwa thaa age xyz jo dekhne me bahut hi massom lag raha tha pass me ek bahut sundar si ladki jaga rahi age xyz thi bhaiya utho na dekho subha ho gayi h maa aapko kab se bula rahi h Ladka ek angdi lete hu baith jata aur bolta h are gudiya kyu jaga diya itni subh suba ladki- are bhaiya dekho kab se subha ho gayi h aap abhi so rahe h sab log kab ka kam karne kheto ja chuke h aap abhi bhi so rahe h Ladka - are mai to bhul hi gaya tha aaj khet me kaam karna achh gudiya maa kaha h Ladki - maa khana bana rahi h tabhi bahar se aawaj aati h are Shruti beta Ajay utha ya abhi nahi dekho duph bhi ho rahi khet me kaam pada h Ye dono koi aur nahi hamre hero aur uski ladli bahen shruti h Shruti - ha ma bhaiya utha gaye h Ajay - achha gudiya chal mai naha ke aata hu mai(ajay)-(height6fit 3inch body WWE ke wrestler ki trah hai aur chehra ek massom bache ki trah h) Mai fresh ho ke maa ke pass gaya aur bolo are maa aaj kya bana rahi ho khane me Maa-beta aaj tere pasand ke aalu ke parathe bana rahi hu tab tak mai rasoi me pahuch gaya tha Maa - Beta kha le jaldi tumhe khet me bhi jana hai nahi to let ho jaoge (Hamare pass 10 bigha ka ek plot h jisse ghar gujara hota h) mai - ha ma jaldi dije ramu kaka intazar kar rahe honge (Ramu kaka hare khete me suru se hi kaam kar rahe h jo bahut hi garib h Unke ek beti h naam hai geeta jo thodi sawali h but chehara bahutsi sundar h aur ghar me koi nahi h) Mai- are gUdiya kaha rah gayi tubhi aaja aaja aaj hamare man pasand aalu ke parathe bane h Shruti- aai bhaiya mai - achha maa mai bahar Baitha hu aap khana leke aayiye tab tak Shruti bhi school ke liye taiyar ho ke aa gayi thi (Shruti abhi 11 me hai gaon ke hi school me padhti h mai 12 me hu but school bahut hi kam jata hu mai koi chiz ek bar padh lu to muje yaad ho jata h) Maa rasoi se bahar aa gayi thi Maa - lo bacho khana kha lo aur maa ne Parthe ko do plate me nikal di Shruti - bhaiya aapke agle mahine se exam bhi suru ho rahe h mai- ha gudiya mai dekh lunga tu tension na le Shruti - bhaiya principal sir hamesha pucht e h ki tumhare bhaiya ki tayari kaisi chal rahi h Mai - are gudiya tu paresan na huwa kar meri tayari bahut hi achhi chal rahi chal kal mai bhi tere sath chalunga . Shruti - Theek h bhaiya batao batao me hamara kha bhi ho gaya Mai - maa ham ja rahe h mai gudiya ko school chod dunga school hamare khet ke raste me hi padta tha Chale gudiya Shruti - ha bhaiya chaliye mera bhi khana ho gaya maine apni cycle nikli aur Shruti ko baithya aur chal diya school ki taraf mai school pahucha aur Shruti ko school ke pass chod diya Mai- to gudiya mai chal raha hu tu ghar chali jana Shruti - ji bhaiya uske baad mai apne khet ki taraf nikal liya jo ki gaon ke las me padta tha jaha kuch hi dur pe ek vishal jangal faila huwa tha mai apni cycle se masti me gaana gungunate hue ja hi raha tha ki pass hi ek ganne ke khet ke pass se chikne ki aawaj aai mai bhi apni cycle rok ke turant usi taraf dauda waha pauch kar dekha ki ek jangli saand ek ladki ko marne ke liye dauda raha tha ye ladki hamre hi muhale ki thi iska naam sitA tha mai turant daud kar uske pas paucha aur us saand se bhid gaya jo bahut ji balwan tha uski seengh ko mai pakad liya aur wo mujhe ek hi bar me utha ke kuch dur pekh diya fir se utha mai aur is bar mai tayar tha mai dubara uski seengh ko pakad liya aur apni puri takat se use peeche ki taraf dakhelne laga wo bhi mujhe marne ki kosis kar raha tha isi bhidant me uski ek seengh aadhe par se tut gayi aur wo saand waha se pagal bail ki tarah rambhata huwa baag gaya mai sita ki taraf ghuma to dekha jo abhi bhi dari aur sahmi khadi thi mai uske pas apni dul mitti jhadte huwe badha Mai - are seet tum theek to ho na Sita - ghabrai huwi awaj me ha mm- mai the ..-theek hu mai - are itna ghabra ku rahu ho sant ho jao saand chala gaya Are mai to sita ke bare me batana bhul hi gaya Sita mere hi umr ki ladki hai jo ek kisan ki beti h iski ghar me eski maa aur baapu hai aur iska khe hamare hi khet ke paas me h aur iski ek choti bahen h uska naam tiya h Sita bahut hi sundar ladki h gaon ke kai ladke iske peeche pade rahte h Sita tab tak sambhal chuki thi sita - sukriya ajay aaj tum nahi aate to ye saand aaj mujhe mar gi deta mai - mai haste huwe are aise kaise tumhe mar deta mere rahte huwe Sita - ha dekh rahi hu tu bhi kisi saand se kam nahi itne khatarnak saand se akele hi bhid gaya mai - are kya kya bole ja rahi mujhe mai koi saand nahi hu mai insan hu Sita - ha wo to abhi abhi mujhe dikha Mai -achha bata kaha ja rahi h sita - khet me ja rahi thi sabji lane ke liye maa ne bulaya tha Mai - achha chal mai bhi tere sath me chalta hu aur usko sath raste ki taraf aaya aur apni cycle utha ke uske sath baat karte huwe chlne laga jo mujhe bhaut hi pyar bhari nazro se lagatar ghure ja rahi thi zisse mai thoda Zep gay aur bola mai - aise kya dekh rahi h kha jayegi kya mujhe wo mre baat se hadbada gayi aur boli sita - na n nahi mai kha dekh rahi hu mai to chal rahi hu aur isi tarah baate karte huwe mai aur sita mhe t pahuch gaye ______________________________
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Post by kingg on Oct 20, 2018 12:49:47 GMT 5.5
Update - 2 Dushri taraf ek pakki sadak bani huwi thi aage jane par do raste bane huwe the aur waha par ek Pathar pe pratpghar likha huwa tha hamara gaon isi riyasat me aata hai Pathar ke samne se do raste bane huwe the dono rasto par bahut hi bade bade dwar bane huwe the Dayi taraf wale raste se jane par jo ki ek bahut hi sandar gaon ki tarf jata hai gaon ke sabse ant me ek bahut hi sandar haweli bani huwi thi jo kafi dur me fali huwi thi haweli ke samne bahut hi bada maidan tha jo ki haweli ke sath hi ek bahut unchi diwar ke sath ghera gaya tha aur haweli me aane ke liye bahut hi majbut ek lohe ka ek bavya gate bana huwa tha jo dekhne me hi rajsi khandan ka lag raha tha ye haweli hai prtapghar ke raja bhanu prtap singh ki ab rajaon ka jamana raha nahi phir bhi yaha pe inki hi hukumat chalti thi
Kuch new character ka arrival introduction Bhanu pratp singh -age 75 year jo abhi bhi kisi se kam nahi lagte chere pe bahut hi tez dikhayi deta h parvati singh age 65 haweli ki malkin jo abhi bhi 50 se kam ki nahi lagti Sushil pratap singh age 48 Bhanu pratap ke Bada beta Kushum singh Age44 Badan bahut hi bhara huwa h jo bahut hi sundar dikyi deti h Jai parap - sushil ka bada beta age 25 year Neha singh - jay ki biwi age 22 Dikhne me kisi heroin se kam nahi Nitin - age 20 jai ka chota bhai Komal - jay ki bahen age 18 kisi modal se kam nahi Naam ke bilkul hi ulta swbhav h bahut hi jiddi aur ghar ki ladli Virendra pratap singh - age 45 bhanu prtap ka chota beta missing Meera singh - age 40 missing Sushila singh Sushil pratap ki bahen age 42 Anirudh singh age 47 sushila ke pati ek bussinessman h Priya age 19 badi beti Nitu choti beti 18 Rohini singh age 37 shushi ki choti bahen Jitendra singh age 41 Madhu badi beti Age 18 Kiran choti beti abhi 11th class me h Ye h new character jinka story me role h
Dusre raste par jae par wha bhi ek sandar haweli bani huwi thi jo Bhanu pratap ka jani dusman tha Introduction Thakur Gajendra pratap singh age 72 Savitri Devi - jinka dehant ho chuka h Ranvijay sing Age 49 thakur ka bada beta Sheela singh - age 45 thakur ki badi bahu Jaswant singh- thakur ka dusra beta age 44 isne sadi nahi ki h Bheema singh - age 25 ranvijay ka bada beta Birju singh singh - age 23 ranvijay ka dusra beta Birju singh - 22 tisra beta
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Post by kingg on Oct 20, 2018 13:07:56 GMT 5.5
Update-3
Haweli ke hal.me ek sanjeeda mahu Bana huwa tha jo kisi bahut hi bade khatre ke aane se pahle santi chayi ho ya hal us haal me baithe sabhi ke chero pe dekha ja sakta h jo kafi paresan the is asanti ko todte huwe Bhanu pratap bole mai bhanu pratap ko BP likunga B.P.- is bar ke mele me kaun hamare taraf se us dangal me ladne ke liye jayega
Sushi pratap ko mai Sp likunga Sp - ha pitaji is baar ke dangal ke liye kaun jayega
Bp - ha tujhe aur tere bete ko bas apne se hi mtlb hai is ghar ki izzat ka khyal nahi h Sp - nahi pitaji mujhe bhi chinta h is khel ke liye ki apne khandan se kaun jayega
Nitin - pitaji mujhe is khooni khel me nahi samil hona h jisme ye na pta ho ki jaan bachegi ya nahi
Parvati - tum sab se rai nahi li gayi ki kaun jayega Agar mera virendra hota to hame paresani nahi hoti Pta nahi mera beta kaha h kis hal me hoga
Sp - ha hame bhi apne bhai ki bahut yaad aati h pta nahi kha hoga
Bp - mahul ko emotional hote dekh bolte h hamra beta jarur hamari madad karne ke liye jarur aayega
Bp - are Sp jai nahi dikhayi de raha h kaha h
Sp - Uski ek jaruri meeting hai aaj to meeting me gaya hai Bp - kuch soachte huwe bolte h achha chlo theek h chlo sab ab khana kha lo
Dushri taraf thakur Gajendra ki haweli me
Haweli ke bhar ek akhade me ek danav jaisa aadmi ek bahut hi banynkar saand se lad raha tha achanak hi us aadmi ne us saad ko utha ke patak diye aur wo saand ekdam saant hogya maidan me ek taliyon ki gadgdahat ki awaj goonj gayi
Thakur Gajendra - sabas bheema aaj hame tum par garv hai ki tum is bar ye dangal jit ke is pratapghar ka raja banaoge Bheema Gajendra ka pota Height 6 fit 11 inch kisi danav se kam nahi bahut hi nirdayi Birju - wah bhaiya is bar to aap ke samne aane par sabki peesab hi nikal jayegi *height 6 fit 4 inch bahut hi krur apne bhai ki trah
Ranvijay - is bar ham us Bp ko bataenge ki hamse dusmni lene ka kya anjam hota h us ki ghar ki sabhi aurto ko nanga nachaenge tab sale ko uski aukat dikhyenge
Isi tarah mahol me ek rakshi tahaki se watawarnd goonj utha
Chlte hai hero ki taraf kya ho raha h waha
Ajay aur sita baat karte huwe apne apne kheto pe pahuch gaye sita apne khet ki taraf chali gayi aur ajay apne khet ki taraf chal diya
Khet ke suru me do kamre bane huwe the ek kamre me tubel laga huwa tha aur kheti karne ke hatiyar rakhe huwe the aur dusre kamre me ek charpi padi thi aur kuch anaj rakha huwa tha jaha sone ki waywstha thi
Ajay khet me pahuch ke ramu kaka ko aawaj lagaya Ajay - are kaka kaha ho Dusri taraf se
Ramu kaka - ha beta mai ghobi ke kyariyon me ghobhi ke pedo ko mitti de raha hu ( 1 bighe me sabji lagi huwi thi aur 1 bighe me ganne lage huwe the baki je 3 bighe me gehu aur saso boya huwa tha ) kuki ye November ka mahina hai to kheto me yahi sab hoga
Note - Dangal ka mela pratapghar ke shiv mandir me hota hai dangal jitne ke baad baad jo koi shiv ka trishul jo jamin me aadhe se jayda gada huwa hai usko nikalega wahi pratapghar ka raja banta h kai salo se koi is trishul ko koi nikal nahi paaya is liye sab apne apne hisab gavo me hukum chalta hai pichli bar ye trisul Bhanupratap ke pita ne nikala tha
Ajay - aur kaka kaise h aap kaka - theek hu ajay beta bas khet pani dene laya ho gaya h Ajay - kisme pani dena h kaka Kaka - ganne me pani dena ha jo lagbhag tayar ho gaya h iske baad pani nahi dena padega Ajay - chaliye kaka mai tubel start kar deta hu aur mai tubel start kar diya Uske baad kaka khetO me pani dekhne lage mai kaka se bola kaka mai jar nadi hokar aata hu Kaka - jaldi aana beta malkin jannengi aap us taraf gaye the to gussa hongi
Mai - theek h kaka jaldi laut aaunga aur mai us taraf chal diya hamre gaon ke last ek kone par jangal hai aur dusri taraf nadi jati h Mai wha 10 min me pahuch jata hu jaha ka watawarn kafi madhur tha yaha aane par meri kuch yaade taza ho jati thi mai hab 8 saal ka tha ti apne papa ke sath yaha ghumne aaya karta jaha aane se mujhe bahut hi sukun milta tha jaise mai papa ke pas aa gaya hu Kuch der time bitane ke baad mai khet pe aa gaya aur dekha ganne me paani bhai gaya h to tubel jakar band kar diya Aur kaka se bola Mai - achha kaka ab ghar chlte h agar kuch chiye ho to aaj ghar pe aa jaiyega
Kaka- nahi beta abhi kuch nahi chahiye jab jarurat hogi bata doonga
Mai - ,achha kaka chlata hu school ki bhi chuti hone wali h aur kaka se itna bol kar mai aage nikal aaya
School ke paas pahucha dekha chutti ho chuki h shruti gate pe khadi thi aur se le kar mai gjar aa gaya
Ghar pahuch kar muh haat doya aur maa se khana kha kar so gaya saam ko need meri shruti ke jagane se khuli
Shruti - bhaiya maa aap ko kasart karne ke liye kab se bula rahi h aap abhi tak so rahe h
Mai - aacha gudiya ja maa se bol mai aa raha hu aur shruti chali gayai
Mai banya aur nikkar me waha pahucha
Ghar ke peeche me ek khali maidan h jisme mai daily kasart karta hu kuki hamara ghar sabse kinare h aur is taraf koi aata jata nahi h
Jaha cement ke bane huwe do dumble rakhe huwe the ek lagbhag 120kg ke aas pas aur dushra 80 kg ka bana huwa tha Mai waha pahucha dekha maa aur shruti pahle se baithi mera intazar kar rahi thi
Mujhe dekhte hi maa boli maa - aaj tum lete ho gaye ho ground ke 30 chakar lagao mai salo se ye sab kar raha tha kyu mujhe nahi pta maa hi mujhse ye sab kar wati thi Mai daily 25 chakar lagata tha aur mai bhagana start mar diye jo ki 30 chakar bahut hi jaldi pura ho gaya Phir maa boli
Maa - ab is dumble ko 50 bar uthao
Mai - maa aap ku daily badhati chali ja rahi ho
N Maa
Maa - kuki beta tumhe aage bahut hi bade bade kaam ko anjam dena h is liye jo kahu wo karo
Uske baad mai dumble uthata raha eske baad 200 pusup mara aur phir last me 80 kg dumble lekar ground ke 10 chakkar lagaya aur mai jisse aaj kafi thak gaya
Mai kasarat kar ke kafi thak gaya tha tab maa boli chal beta mai pani gram kar deti hu tu naha le kuki November ka mahina h thandhi padne lagi thi
Mai - theek h maa uske baad maa ne pani garam kiya aur mai naha ke aaya aur bistar pe let gaya kuch der baad Shruti aur maa mere kamre me aayi chuki maa aur Shruti dusre wale kamre me soti thi
Maa - le beta ye doodh aur kagha pee le thakawat nahi lagegi daily mai doodh aur kadha peeta tha pta nahi maa usme kya kya mila ke deti thi jo bahut hi fayda karta tha Aur mai dono pee liya
Maa - achha beta tu let ja mai tera sarir ki malis kar du
Aur mai upar ke kapde nikal ke let gaya
Shruti - maa mai bhi bhaiya ki malis karungi
Mai - are gudiya tu kyu mehnat karegi maa kar degi
Shruti - zid karte huwe nahi mujhe bhi karna h malish
Maa - achha aa tu bhi apne bhaiya ki malis kar de
Uske baad meri malis maa aur shruti karne lagi jisse mujhe bahut hi sukun mil raha tha
Achanak Shruti - boli maa aap bhaiya ko itana kyu kasrat karwati h
Maa - kyu ki beta koi musibat aaygi to hamari raksha kaun karega
Shruti - fir bhi maa koi itna kasrat karwTa hai kya kisi se
Mai santi se dono ki baate sun raha tha isi prakar shruti maa se bahas karte huw meri malis kar di uske baad maa khana banane chali gayi aur mai aur shruti school ke bare me baate karne lage
Dusri taraf Thakur Gajendra ki haweli me ek aadami Bheema ka pair pakad ke gid gida raha tha
Aadmi - malik mujhe chod dijiye ab dobara aisi galti nahi hogi
Bheema - Chal ja baag tuje jane deta ek bayankar bol phute Bheema ke mukh se
Wo aadmi kapte huwe utha aur bhagne laga
Uske baad Bheema ne waha rakhe huwe bhale ko uthya aur aadmi ko nisana banaya aur fenk diya
Aadmi - ahhhh aur ek dardnak cheek gunj uthi aur wo haweli ke gate pe gir ke dam tod diya waha sab ke sab ye nazara dekh ke kaanp uthe
Bheema - gaddari karne wale ko Bheema ek hi saza deta h aur wo h maut ki saza ek raubdar awaj me garjana kya
Dusri taraf Bp singh ke hweli me
Sabhi dinning table pe baithe huwe the jaha raat ke khane ki plate lag chuki thi haweli me khana ek dayi banati h jo verso se haweli me rahti h Bp - Jai beta kaisi rahi meeting tumhari
Jai - Achhi rhi dada ji is baar tender hame mila h
Sp - achha beta badiya is bar ham apnegaon ko sahar ki sadko se jod denge
Jai - ha papa yaha ke log shar se na jude hone ke karan kafi samasya hoti h
Bp - ha beta isse to hamre gaon ka vikas hi hoga
Isi prakar ki baate hoti rahi aur sabka khana peena ho gaya aur sab sone chle gaye
Idhar mai aur shruti baate kar rhe the tabhi maa ne hame khane pe bulayaAur ham sab sath baith ke khane lage
Shruti achanak boli
Shruti - maa maa bhaiya ka 2 din baad bhaiya ka birthday h
Maa - are ha mai to bhul hi gayi thi ki mera beta parso 20 ka ho jayega
Mai - ha maa mai to bhul hi gaya tha ki mera parso birthday h
Shruti - bhaiya apne birthday pe is bar mujhe ghumane le chlo ge na
Mai - ha gudiya chal is bar ham khub maje karenge aur Raat me sab dost mil kar khoob maje karenge
Tab beech me maa boli
Maa - are bacho khanA khal lo bahut raat ho gayi kal tum dono ko school bhi jana h aur fir ham sab khanA kha kar sone chle aaye jo aur mai mitte spno ki wadiyon me kho gaya
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Post by kabir on Oct 20, 2018 15:19:42 GMT 5.5
Welcome and Congrats for new story .
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Post by kabir on Oct 20, 2018 15:21:20 GMT 5.5
Bhai , ek sath bahat sare update parke maza agaya .
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Post by kabir on Oct 20, 2018 15:22:51 GMT 5.5
Ese hi likhte raho bhai . hum log hamesa aap ki sath hai . all the best . take care …...
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Post by kingg on Oct 20, 2018 17:57:54 GMT 5.5
Bhai , ek sath bahat sare update parke maza agaya . Thnx bhai
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Post by kingg on Oct 20, 2018 17:59:54 GMT 5.5
Bhai , ek sath bahat sare update parke maza agaya . Thnx bhai keep supporting bhai .
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